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本期作者：张婷婷

2023年9月9日雅思大作文题目

Some people suggest that young adults should be encouraged to do some unpaid work for a period of time for the community to help people. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people?(2023/09/09)

范文及解析

Introduction

Young adults, as responsible citizens of a progressive society, are highly suggested to be engaged in unpaid community service. In spite of some valid concerns to such involvements, I find myself instaunchagreement with the statement with some of the reasonselucidatedin this essay.

解析

本次考题跟剑桥雅思9 Test 2的大作文很像，但是限定词有所不同，审题注意针对young adults 和community；

剑桥雅思9 Test2：Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

❖ staunch adj.坚定的；

❖ elucidate v.阐明，解释;

Body 1

Indisputably, charitable activities in community organisations will proffer young adults a profound life experience. With daily livesbeing awash withelectronic gadgets, we are living in an age when the young, after work and study, mostly go home andare glued tobrowsing the Internet or playing computer games. A healthy life balance,by this token, is increasingly hard to follow. Sparing time in charity work, therefore, will prevent them from sitting andsquanderingtheir time. Meanwhile, skills gained through these compulsory work, be it working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children, will be anasseton their CV and bringtangible boonsin increasing their employability.

解析

(1) 社区组织活动将为年轻人提供深刻的人生体验，帮助年轻人获得实践性技能，有助于他们将来的就业；

❖ be awash with v.被…所淹没 ;

❖ are glued to v.盯着；紧贴着；粘到…上；

❖ by this token 按照这个逻辑；由此推断;

❖ squander v.浪费，挥霍（金钱、时间等）；

❖ asset n.有利条件，有价值的人或物；

❖ tangible adj.明确的，真实的；

❖ boon n.裨益，优势;

毫无疑问，社区组织的慈善活动将为年轻人提供深刻的人生体验。我们处在这样一个时代:日常生活中充斥着电子产品，年轻人在工作和学习之余，大部分时间都呆在家里，沉迷于上网或玩电脑游戏。健康的生活平衡越来越难以实现。因此，把时间花在慈善工作上，可以防止他们浪费时间。与此同时，从这些义务工作中获得的技能，无论是为慈善机构工作，改善邻里关系，还是向更年幼的孩子教授体育运动，都将成为他们简历上的一笔财富，并为提高他们的就业能力带来实实在在的好处。

Body 2

From the community’s perspective, with amushroomingnumber of young people involving in unpaid services, communities will be more harmonious and prosperous. By devoting themselves in serving others in community, young people are able to learn to empathise with others and be sensitive to other people’s needs. In this case, people will be more deeply attached to each other with strong community cohesion. As everyone gathers together as close as family, it offers the feasibility to createamityand unity inneighborlyrelations.

解析

（2）年轻人参加社区服务有助于增强邻里关系，让社区变得更和谐稳定；

❖ mushrooming adj.迅速增长的；越来越多的；

❖ amity n.友好；亲善关系；

❖ neighborly adj.睦邻的；友好的；

从社区的角度来看，随着越来越多的年轻人参与无偿服务，社区将更加和谐和繁荣。通过在社区中为他人服务，年轻人能够学会与他人感同身受，考虑他人的需要。在这种情况下，人们之间的联系会更加紧密，社区凝聚力会更强。当每个人都像家人一样亲密地聚在一起时，便能创造出更睦邻的关系和团结。

Body 3

On the other hand, opponents raise their own concern and argue that the primary duty and responsibility for young adults are tozero inon work and study. Most youngsters, bread winners in the family,are swamped withwork under thiscut-throatcompetition, whichcoercesthem tobeaver awayat work in order toamassa sizable fortune and strive for better lives. Compulsory community service,accordingly, would be a distraction from this. In addition, youth is a stage when the young should be allowed to enjoy their lives instead ofbeing tied downwith the responsibilities in community services.

解析

（3）反对者认为年轻人的主要义务和责任是集中精力工作和学习，社区服务将分散人们的注意力；

❖ zero in on v.集中注意力于...;

❖ be swamped with v.被淹没：被大量的事物或任务所压倒，无法应付;

❖ cut-throat adj.（竞争）残酷的，激烈的；

❖ coerce v.强制，迫使；

❖ beaver away v.忙碌地工作;埋头苦干；

❖ amass v.积累；

❖ accordingly adv.因此，所以；

❖ be tied down v.束缚于，捆绑于;

另一方面，反对者提出了他们自己的担忧，他们认为年轻人的主要义务和责任是集中精力工作和学习。大多数年轻人是家里的顶梁柱，在这种残酷的竞争下，他们被工作淹没，迫使他们努力工作，以积累可观的财富，争取更好的生活。因此，强制性社区服务将分散人们的注意力。此外，青年阶段，年轻人应该被允许享受他们的生活，而不是被束缚在社区服务的责任中。

Ending Paragraph

Torecapitulate, it is aniftyidea to set unpaid community service, a win-win practice for both young people themselves and the society as a whole, be a compulsory part of young people’s lives.

解析

❖ recapitulate vi.概括；重述要点；

❖ nifty adj.漂亮的;棒的；

综上所述，将无薪社区服务作为年轻人生活的一部分是一个很好的想法，这对年轻人自己和整个社会整体来说都是一种双赢的做法。